Monday, April 7, 2008

Unpainted


you were once
the sky
shining through
my April sunrise
revealing spirits
once concealed
sifting twisted,
discarded memories.

lingering heat
taste of hibiscus tea
on your lips where

words mixed
in a warm soup, enticing;
letters of the alphabet
hang on a teaspoon-
screaming, in fervor
dancing, in desperation.

our love
once burst in April rain
now lost
without gravity-
unpainted in space,
only silencing
in pain, it seems.



r_L

4 comments:

MR said...

Nice poem!

Anonymous said...

red,

great metaphoric verse, and ever real visuals and strong conclusion,

"our love
once burst in April rain
now lost
without gravity-
unpainted in space,
only silencing
in pain, it seems."

admirable poem overall.

c.

izzahismail said...

very deep tho.but the feelings are obvious.

does it has anything to do with you anyway??

the line i like the most, only silencing in pain,it seems.

well done.i like to read poems.but i have no sense of arts to create one.haha. ;))

hazi_ r k said...

thank you all, for your comments.

well char, i'm glad you liked it. i realized that i had to come up with something different that could explain the love-lost moments to which i'm not sure i had delivered. alas, i'm happy with this one but of course, i'm looking forward to writing something more! so be sure to stick around (as always!);-)

izzah, these things didn't really happen to me, but i somehow tried to depict the feelings and put em into paper. huhu. well, i used to feel like it- that i didn't have much to give and write. but then, here i am now, i always seem to have "things" in my head! hehe. so don't give up just yet. who knows, things might be unstoppable for you too!

... again, thanks very much guys ;-)

hazi.